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November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
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Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
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\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark

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When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.

© Lydia E., Escondido, CA

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K.M.S.Shear BRONZE said...
on Jun. 10 2011 at 6:42 am
K.M.S.Shear BRONZE, Cherokee, Iowa
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i love the way you used the words.
Sky.. BRONZE said...
on May. 19 2011 at 11:38 pm
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I don't understand it.
Zekerom999 said...
on May. 19 2011 at 9:21 pm
SWEET MOTHER OF... THIS IS AWSOME!!!
young-and-confused SILVER said...
on May. 19 2011 at 7:53 pm
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this poem is beautiful. i absolutely love it.
TolkienLewisWhitman BRONZE said...
on May. 19 2011 at 7:04 pm
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Wonderful! You did do a great job using figurative language, and touching our deepest feelings.
J.P. said...
on May. 19 2011 at 12:28 pm

I love the whole thing... it sounds relly deep(:

 

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I was going to try and decribe this poem but there is no words to describe it.
little-miss-mistakes GOLD said...
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amazing amazing completely amazing... but if you read all these other comments you already knew that!!!! seriously, greatness.... my one negative comment would be that the picture looks to much like justin beiber  *shudder*, but seriously great
bken24 said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 8:25 pm
I'd like to shake your hand and say "Well done."
evergreen232 said...
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wow! great job! i love the last 4 lines :)(: very thoughtful!
happyboat SILVER said...
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Wow. This was great. "A head upon my hat"? I think yes.
Hope_ BRONZE said...
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Its Awesomee:D
I Love It!'(:
Cerberus SILVER said...
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plainly and bluntly put...LOVE IT!!
Kelsey_O SILVER said...
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This is amazing! I love the line "except the pitter patter of my soul/ across the aluminum roof of my mind". It's brilliant. The imagery and the languange in this is just so cool. Amazing work! Check out my article? 
WindDancer GOLD said...
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This is stunning. It's so thoughtful, and the imagery is just amazing. It connects and flows, and it doesn't ramble like I tend to do when I write poetry. It's like a puzzle- really, really good work. Keep writing and dreaming!
Kelly Milicia BRONZE said...
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my.freedom.lies.in.free.verse PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 10:50 am
my.freedom.lies.in.free.verse PLATINUM, Tosa, Wisconsin
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srry i didnt mean to reply, i thought it wuz a new comment! oops
my.freedom.lies.in.free.verse PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 10:49 am
my.freedom.lies.in.free.verse PLATINUM, Tosa, Wisconsin
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this has the most metaphors stuffed into the fewest lines ive ever seen! i wish i could write like you do!
Snowdancer153 said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 10:34 am
This is soooooooo good and amazing. LOVE it!!!!
thegirlwiththebrokenheart BRONZE said...
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This is amazingly good! I love the way your word choices collide! You should take a look at mine! thanks jenna.