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Another Metaphor of Life MAG

October 14, 2008
By Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.

© Brianna C., Lincoln Park, MI

The author's comments:
I happened to be blowing bubbles in my room when my thoughts suddenly took a semi-philosophical turn and came up with this metaphor. I liked the idea immediately, if only because it was both lighthearted and yet potentially cynical (in pointing out that a person's life, no matter how long his/her "imprint" lasts, will fade away eventually).
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on Nov. 13 2011 at 7:33 pm
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I really liked this your writting gets so deep... Please Continue
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on Nov. 13 2011 at 7:24 pm
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Very good metaphor. And i love bubbles
sweetheart2598 SILVER said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 7:04 pm
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I like it too
SophieG. SILVER said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 5:41 pm
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i love this metaphor! People PLEASE check out my work!!!!
ashleyn PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 5:38 pm
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I love this metaphor! Crazy what some imagination (and bubbles) can create. Wonderful work of art <3
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on Nov. 13 2011 at 5:06 pm
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I apsolutly love this poem people feel free to llook at and comment on my work
JuneTaz said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 12:20 pm
Love the metaphor!! It really does describe life. Keep up the philosophical thinking! ;)
xximjustmexx PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 2:28 am
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As a writer, i have explored all options an opinions and beliefs. I know very well that there is a god to some people, for i go to a Catholic school. What i said is MY opinion, and nothing is going to change it, so all i can say is that i hope you and everyone else can rspecct that, just as i respecct their opinions.
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on Nov. 13 2011 at 12:22 am
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For a writer, that's pretty close-minded of you to say. I think the point of writing is to explore all options and opinions and beliefs. Not just say "there is a God" or "there isn't a God" because, there IS a God to different people; even if they aren't you.
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on Oct. 22 2011 at 8:33 pm
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This is awesome! Check out my work plleeeeassse!!!!!!
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on Oct. 22 2011 at 4:12 pm
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This is amazing! Can you checkout some of my work?
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on Oct. 22 2011 at 3:39 pm
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Really loved it. please, keep up the fantastic work!
xximjustmexx PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 1:04 pm
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there is no god. only life and the people in it.
xximjustmexx PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 1:02 pm
xximjustmexx PLATINUM, Oak Forest, Illinois
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You poem has a gentler and nicer affect than mine. I was also writing about the same thing, how sooner or later everything someone does is later forgotten and not worth anything anymore. It's called Bad Image. There's also another one called Stronger, it's not quite about the same thing, but it's somewhat related. I would really appriecate it if you ckecked them out;) ohh. I gave this a 5/5 btw. great job:)
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good job i liked it.
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on Oct. 22 2011 at 10:11 am
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I love this poem. :) I like how it's not really religious, even though you use "god". The capitalization can be necessary or unnecessary when you use it in such a way. It does have a certain view on life that not alot of people see. :) Keep writing.
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on Oct. 22 2011 at 9:16 am
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LOVE IT. keep writing!
grelouni said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 8:10 am
Maybe some bubbles stain the surface on which they land...  never truly disappearing...always leaving their mark.
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Nicely done! The spacing was very effective and really drove home the point of the poem. The only criticism I have is trivial -- capitalize the "g" in God, although I can see where you might have left it lowercase on purpose.
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I love you poems!!! Keep on writing!!!!