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Do You See Me?

March 14, 2013
By EnnaGirl SILVER, Sacramento, California
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EnnaGirl SILVER, Sacramento, California
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Be the change you want to see in the world<br /> - Ghandi

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Darkness will bloom
As you walk by
Rupturing my heart
Can you see it burst?
The inky blackness
Spreading
Spilling over my fingertips
Clouding my breath
Dripping to the floor
Your touch leaves me wanting
Leaves me breathless
But the shadow is consuming
No one talks
No one looks
I am drifting
Sinking
Into the dark cloud
I am alone
Black mist dampens the air
Moistening my lips
Swirling fragments of glass
Shatter against my skin
As the voices drift away
Fading into the distance
Never ending silence
As you walk by
But do you see me?

© Kellie S., New London, NH

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This article has 13 comments.

x_rbdf GOLD said...
on May. 4 2013 at 12:51 am
x_rbdf GOLD, Augusta, Georgia
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I loved it !!!! Beautifuly dark.It really left me thinking  1000%
Tabitha1233 PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 27 2013 at 10:45 am
Tabitha1233 PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
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I would rather live my life as if there is a God and die to find out there isn&#039;t, than live my life as if there isn&#039;t and die to find out there is. Albert Camus

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Great poem! Thwere's alot of depth and meaning!
Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 26 2013 at 11:03 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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i agree with hte puncutaion but way to be deep and intense
MissLizzieGirl GOLD said...
on Apr. 19 2013 at 10:14 pm
MissLizzieGirl GOLD, Arvada, Colorado
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I like it but I suggest more punctuation. Just play around with it.
MeggieMills SILVER said...
on Apr. 19 2013 at 3:34 pm
MeggieMills SILVER, Baltimore, Maryland
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This is such beautiful work... I love it. The same meaning is in my heart too.
victorious- said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 8:04 am
victorious-, Karachi, Other
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awesome...............well done..........
ZaZaGoober BRONZE said...
on Apr. 17 2013 at 10:36 pm
ZaZaGoober BRONZE, Hayward, California
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This poem makes me sigh and I mean that in agood way :) Your description is wicked and and you should definately write more.
swat17 SILVER said...
on Apr. 17 2013 at 9:20 pm
swat17 SILVER, Mineral, Virginia
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I love the imagery, terrific job! 5/5
Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 17 2013 at 9:07 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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I know how you feel, but  keep it up i love how your poem went
SunnyDreams BRONZE said...
on Apr. 11 2013 at 5:22 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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i luv it please keep writing more
readaholic PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 6 2013 at 8:18 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
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I agree, the flow is very good.  I really love the imagery and word choice.  Very, very good poem!
Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 31 2013 at 12:31 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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&quot; a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness&quot;

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keeo writing that was really good :3 i loved the flow
ZainabS SILVER said...
on Mar. 31 2013 at 12:30 pm
ZainabS SILVER, Karachi, Other
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Keep writing man, thats really good :D