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A Dreamy Town Girl

October 28, 2015
By farheen BRONZE, Hyderabad, Other
farheen BRONZE, Hyderabad, Other
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Favorite Quote:
TO RISE LIKE SUN FIRST WE SHOULD BURN LIKE SUN.


A town girl is like an oysters pearl,

but one day has to get out of its shell.

Brought up with cultures and traditions,

but grows up making many mutations.

She wants her rights to achieve greater heights,

wants to fly like Oliver and Wilbur Wright.

Wants to face the world to take her stand,

but lack of family support is what lags her behind.

She survives during every twist and turn of life,

but her innocence gets lost during this strive.

Wants someone to understand her heart and soul,

and gives her an opportunity to reach her goal.

I too am town girl,and these are our wants,

Is there anyone who can come with us and hunt?

just want to steer our own vehicle of life,

and will work hard like a bee in its hive...............



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Ridzzz said...
on Nov. 12 2015 at 9:05 am
Ridzzz, Sangamner, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
1)THEY HATE US COZ THEY AIN&#039;T US....<br /> 2)OLD IS GOLD ....<br /> 3)IF YOU WILL RUN BEHIND EXCELLENCE ... SUCCESS WILL RUN BEHIND YOU....

Dis is a awsm poem ... I luved it..xplains everything

on Nov. 11 2015 at 10:11 am
L.J.Barnes. GOLD, Powhatan, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Avoid roasted cabbage, don&#039;t eat earwax and look on the bright side of life!<br /> ~Angela the Herbalist

Try to be more metaphorical... like "but lack of family support is what lags her behind." Trying to make it more poetic, by comparing it to something. Try to evoke images from the poem. It is hard to do, even I have a hard time... But by making the reader feel like they are a part of the poem, when they actually can see and feel what the author is describing makes a better poem. Keep writing! :D