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Always Last

March 28, 2014
By EddyE SILVER, Eightmile, Alabama
EddyE SILVER, Eightmile, Alabama
7 articles 11 photos 8 comments

Another day
Another struggle
Household an growed cold and I'm falling in the puddle
I tumble and fall everytime the world gives me trouble
And the pain hits me with a double
Man I'm tired of always putting everyone first
It's time I realize that in my eyes I deserve the best and dig my heart up out the dirt
They take your kindness for weakness and dirty up your shirt
But its over
I'm tired of being last
I'm bout to take these feelings and throw em in the trash
Suffocate this love in a bag
Look at what i got move on and put this present in my past
There's no more being last



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EddyE SILVER said...
on Apr. 1 2014 at 10:10 am
EddyE SILVER, Eightmile, Alabama
7 articles 11 photos 8 comments
Thanks for comment

Sgalli BRONZE said...
on Mar. 31 2014 at 8:43 pm
Sgalli BRONZE, Templeton, California
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everybody is a genius. But If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will live its whole life believing it is stupid.- Albert Einstein

I admire how you can turn your emotions into a poem that gets peoples attention, and your not afraid to tell the world how you really feel through poetry.

EddyE SILVER said...
on Mar. 31 2014 at 4:38 pm
EddyE SILVER, Eightmile, Alabama
7 articles 11 photos 8 comments
Thanks for comment and I recognized those errors after posting because this wasn't written, it came right from the mind. 

on Mar. 31 2014 at 12:34 pm
NaomiHallS PLATINUM, Ventura, California
26 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If they cut off both hands, I will compose music anyway holding the pen in my teeth." -Shostakovich

I really like the essence of frustration in your poem, but the abbreviations and punctuation mistakes took away from the focus; ex: its should be "it's." Good job though!

EddyE SILVER said...
on Mar. 30 2014 at 9:49 pm
EddyE SILVER, Eightmile, Alabama
7 articles 11 photos 8 comments
Thanks for comment 

Nadaa SILVER said...
on Mar. 30 2014 at 7:23 pm
Nadaa SILVER, Bradenton, Florida
5 articles 0 photos 13 comments
I really love how it rhymes. Your emotion is clearily felt through this poem.