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the day i swallowed the sun

May 26, 2018
By saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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the day i finally caught the sun
between my lips
was the day i was set free
from the iron cage
with its iron bars,
that crushed my arms
and shattered my lungs.
i closed my eyes
and let the golden flames
drip down the back of my throat
and coat my tongue like honey.
i felt it spread through
my chest,
felt the thing i
had been chasing
for years
and years
and years.
i watched as the inky blackness
that had suffocated me
for so many silent nights
bled from my fingertips and
sunk into the dirt,
staining the daisies
and wilting the poppies.
a golden bead
slipped
down my cheek,
and i wondered
why my tears
had never tasted so
sweet.
sitting down with the sunflowers,
i watched the cotton candy
clouds
float across the baby blue sky,
and began writing about
the day i swallowed the sun.

© Michael T., Letart, WV

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Catniss SILVER said...
on Oct. 20 2018 at 12:53 pm
Catniss SILVER, Jakarta, Other
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So beautifully and uniquely. Nice use of symbolism.
SonnyT BRONZE said...
on Oct. 16 2018 at 9:25 am
SonnyT BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
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This is beautiful! The language, the imagery, I really enjoyed reading this poem!!
williamgrantland said...
on Oct. 13 2018 at 3:22 pm
williamgrantland, Columbia, South Carolina
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wow! awesome job!!
CheerSwimmer8 SILVER said...
on Oct. 1 2018 at 9:51 am
CheerSwimmer8 SILVER, Browntown, Wisconsin
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I want to swallow the sun now that was beautiful
kmagic BRONZE said...
on Sep. 28 2018 at 10:17 am
kmagic BRONZE, Denver, Colorado
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This made me almost cry my god this is such a beautiful peace.
californiapoppy BRONZE said...
on Sep. 25 2018 at 10:35 pm
californiapoppy BRONZE, Hayward, California
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This is so beautifullllllll
I’m dyinggggggg
deanib SILVER said...
on Sep. 18 2018 at 7:54 pm
deanib SILVER, Valle Vista, California
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I really enjoyed your description of how the sun felt in your chest and how it coated your tongue. However, I would say that the ending doesn't really fell resolved.
rockstar_KK GOLD said...
on Sep. 12 2018 at 10:50 am
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Very descriptive. Well done.
ramblingwriter_7 GOLD said...
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Beautiful! Great job.
littlesun BRONZE said...
on Aug. 24 2018 at 10:12 am
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this is soo beautiful omg
Clary_Fray DIAMOND said...
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I like this a lot
TeaOnPluto PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 10 2018 at 5:31 am
TeaOnPluto PLATINUM, Dublin, Other
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You have talent, this is really beautiful.
Meghali Bari BRONZE said...
on Jul. 28 2018 at 5:12 am
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This poem is really wonderful .
Rhiannon_4 DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 25 2018 at 3:39 pm
Rhiannon_4 DIAMOND, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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This poem is so beautiful I'm speechless. I love the style, keep up the good work!
--notte_stellata-- SILVER said...
on Jul. 21 2018 at 6:39 pm
--notte_stellata-- SILVER, San Jose, California
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It's beautiful, and I don't know... I think the word that represents it the best is 'Freedom'. Incredible Poem. Keep writing!
EyesofIris GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2018 at 3:47 pm
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I love this poem, thank you for sharing!
Olivia-Atlet ELITE said...
on Jun. 22 2018 at 9:36 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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P.S.: I submitted a feedback post for you, and really hope your piece gets published!! Gah! I love it so much!!!!
Olivia-Atlet ELITE said...
on Jun. 22 2018 at 9:23 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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This gave me the chills! So powerful, raw, and touching. I can feel the tone of the poem, a soft, ephemeral heart beat, seeping through my computer screen. This is an amazing piece, and I encourage you to continue writing enthralling poetry such as this!
karisuna GOLD said...
on Jun. 22 2018 at 3:16 am
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The words flow so well. You’re an amazing writer!
LoveIsAllYouNeed BRONZE said...
on Jun. 11 2018 at 8:25 pm
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Beautiful writing style;) This is a great piece