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The Lady in Smoke

March 26, 2015
By dgeileen PLATINUM, Livingston, New Jersey
dgeileen PLATINUM, Livingston, New Jersey
31 articles 2 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.&rdquo; <br /> ― Oscar Wilde


Everything about her was wispy from her
skin, draped across her tiny frame,
rooted with veins which were either
blue or green (she couldn't decide which,
buying makeup was a hassle) to the drapes
beneath her eyes which were either
purple or black (the concealer did not
differentiate) to the yellow tint of her nails which
she wishes were still pink (but oh--
what nail polish can do). But her eyes
that watched her last cigarette,
appeared to the passerby as
white, (color contacts would not
be of aid) imprinted by the smoke she lived.



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on Mar. 30 2015 at 6:36 pm
dgeileen PLATINUM, Livingston, New Jersey
31 articles 2 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.&rdquo; <br /> ― Oscar Wilde

Thanks! I have a problem with the flow a lot but I'm working on it!

on Mar. 30 2015 at 10:34 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

This is very well written and has a lot of helpful detail. I would recommend editing the flow, since (even though it works very nicely at times) in places, it could be better.