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Your Heart Was My Home Until You Handed Me an Eviction Notice MAG

November 15, 2008
By amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
9 articles 2 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
maybe i know that you'll crave my secure arms someday, but i'll have come across someone who wasn't afraid. and that's why i can't let go.


I removed the layers of blankets from my aching bones
to excavate the secrets that were held together by saliva
in papier-mâché envelopes, only to chew on disappointments
and lie on shards of fragile stained glass that tampered with my flaws,
instead of putting me back together with multicolored duct tape
so gray was only found inside of my body.

I wrung the tears from your sweatshirt and decided it was time
to give it back to you, in exchange for my serpent heart

[barely beating,

barely breathing];
instead of curling inside your stomach and making you
nearly as ill as I had become, just by drinking venomous nectar
and digesting fireflies so a small portion of me would feel alive,
I climbed over your picket fence and let you recline my eyes
in another awkward position to the point where I only chain-smoked
the main exhibits of your aesthetic proportions and declined
every deficiency of the person you truly are,


i. blunt



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on Nov. 19 2010 at 7:47 pm
EmilyNicole BRONZE, Pensacola, Florida
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The biggest misktake you can make is being too afraid to make one.

This is beautiful! You have a lot of talent! I really enjoyed it!

on Nov. 19 2010 at 5:10 pm
WynterPage95 ELITE, Monticello, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
"It's better to burn out than to fade away..." -Kurt Cobain

Hey girl! it's me GothChik95! I think you were the one who rated my piece "The One Who's Left Behind" 5 stars. So anyway thanks! And I love this! That's why I think it deserves 5 stars!

on Nov. 19 2010 at 3:55 pm
HarleyBugg1 PLATINUM, Macon, Georgia
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"One truth may hurt more than a hundred lies, but I'd rather hear a thousand truths than one lie."

aww! I loved it!

on Nov. 19 2010 at 3:40 pm
Ahrenzell BRONZE, Foxborough, Massachusetts
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"Possibility is no longer a factor. All that matters now is truth." - The Plague of Ahrenzell

VERY well written. Nice job!

Also, I'd love some feedback on my writing!


on Nov. 19 2010 at 3:38 pm
Ahrenzell BRONZE, Foxborough, Massachusetts
3 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Possibility is no longer a factor. All that matters now is truth." - The Plague of Ahrenzell

VERY well-written. Heart-wrenching.

Also, I'd love some feedback on my writing too!


lllovvverr said...
on Nov. 19 2010 at 12:21 pm
this poetry is very descriptive i started crying when i heard this piece

on Nov. 19 2010 at 7:54 am
cutiepie123 SILVER, Willamsburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
life is to short to live to the fullest

i love this  its very good youre very discriptive with your work

on Oct. 28 2010 at 10:35 pm
writer4life<3 BRONZE, Otis, Louisiana
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&quot;And so the lion fell in ove with the lamb.&quot; Twilight. Edward to Bella

very nice i enjoyed this work keep it up.

on Oct. 28 2010 at 4:06 pm
Dommy-Wommy SILVER, St.cloud, Minnesota
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According to yesterday, today is tomorrow.

this is absoultly astounding!

on Oct. 28 2010 at 12:16 pm
nicala edwards, Edgard, Louisiana
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tht was incredible. i felt as if i was experiencing with you =)

on Oct. 28 2010 at 10:29 am
KassyElizabeth DIAMOND, Argyle, New York
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Very intresting writing style.

on Oct. 6 2010 at 5:10 pm
ThatEsotericGirl. GOLD, Omaha, Nebraska
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He who knows not, &amp;knows not that he knows not, is a fool, shun him; He who knows not, &amp;knows that he knows not, is a child, teach him.He who knows, &amp;knows not that he knows, is asleep, wake him. He who knows, &amp;knows that he knows, is wise, follow him

goood! hey check out my work if ya want!

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on Oct. 6 2010 at 3:17 pm
Elisabeth GOLD, Nottingham, New Hampshire
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&quot;A true friend is hard to find, difficult to leave, and impossible to forget.&quot;

Really Good!

nitabita07 said...
on Oct. 6 2010 at 1:41 pm
you are a very good writer. keep continueing on what you are doing!!:)

on Oct. 6 2010 at 11:31 am
iwillalwaysbemyself PLATINUM, Murphy, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
dream as if you&#039;ll live forever, Do as if you&#039;ll die tomorrow

very very good i love it

 


shedevil said...
on Oct. 6 2010 at 7:55 am
shedevil, Spotsylvania, Virginia
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This poem is really strong and has a lot of emotion, you didnt hold back.

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on Oct. 6 2010 at 12:03 am
j-rye SILVER, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace - Jimi Hendrix

pure talent

on Sep. 14 2010 at 6:41 pm
Gothgirl BRONZE, Thomasville, North Carolina
4 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The one you love hurts you the most.&quot;

I love it. It has so much emotion behind it.

on Sep. 14 2010 at 5:49 pm
Fashionita101 GOLD, Pembroke Pines, Florida
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Your an amazing writer, the point that you were trying to make came across beautifully and also made me think of how i related to your pain

on Sep. 14 2010 at 5:15 pm
babygirl13021, Auburn, New York
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i think she is a good writer