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January 6, 2014
By OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
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OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
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"You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while." -Eckhart Tolle

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eyes burning
red
salty
sting
digging down my dejected face
to excavate the truth
eyes burning
red
salty
sting
carving canals down my cheeks
to make way for barges freighting my baggage
eyes burning
red
salty
sting
making motes lined with mascara
and dragging my demons down to the guard the draw bridge

© Victoria W., Arcadia, CA

The author's comments:
I wrote this while I was crying, hysterically sobbing, which I felt was pathetic. I felt so guilty and wanted to claw my face off. So, instead of pulling my hair out, I wrote this.
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OneProzacADay PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 21 2014 at 11:23 pm
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
37 articles 0 photos 58 comments

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&quot;You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while.&quot; -Eckhart Tolle

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WOW I've read this how many times and I JUST realized there's a freaking typo in the last line. god and people ask me to proofread their stuff
OneProzacADay PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 7:24 pm
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
37 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while.&quot; -Eckhart Tolle

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thank you so much! it's great to get feedback
OneProzacADay PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 7:24 pm
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while.&quot; -Eckhart Tolle

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thanks! e. e. cummings is definitely one of my writing idols
KristinC PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 5:56 pm
KristinC PLATINUM, Cupertino, California
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&quot;So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past.&quot;<br /> -F.Scott Fitzgerald, the Great Gatsby<br /> <br /> &quot;To write it, it took three months; to conceive it three minutes; to collect the data in it all my life.&quot;<br /> -F. Scott Fitzgerald

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The emotion and imagery in this poem is stunning! I love the rawness and ee-cummings-esque nature of your prose! :)
TanviKusum DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 3:56 pm
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All men who have achieved great things have been great dreamers. <br /> Orison Swett Marden<br /> <br /> &quot;The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say.&quot; - Anais Nin<br /> <br /> we speak in hushed voices so as to not wake our memories

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I love this! It's beautifully written I love the emotions, it's somewhat how I feel