Red Salty Sting | Teen Ink
  1. Home
  2. Poetry
  3. Free Verse
  4. Red Salty Sting

Red Salty Sting MAG

January 6, 2014
By OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
More by this author
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
37 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while." -Eckhart Tolle

View profile

eyes burning
red
salty
sting
digging down my dejected face
to excavate the truth
eyes burning
red
salty
sting
carving canals down my cheeks
to make way for barges freighting my baggage
eyes burning
red
salty
sting
making motes lined with mascara
and dragging my demons down to the guard the draw bridge

© Victoria W., Arcadia, CA

The author's comments:
I wrote this while I was crying, hysterically sobbing, which I felt was pathetic. I felt so guilty and wanted to claw my face off. So, instead of pulling my hair out, I wrote this.
Post a comment
Submit your own

Similar Articles

Previous Next
Poetry
My Sister's Keeper
By Angels1031 BRONZE
Fort Worth, Texas
Angels1031 BRONZE, Fort Worth, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 4 comments
View profile
Poetry
Death At Your Door
By sHaDoWnInJa PLATINUM
West Jordan, Utah
sHaDoWnInJa PLATINUM, West Jordan, Utah
31 articles 0 photos 3 comments
View profile
Poetry
Joys of Life
By Daniel Seeley Hicks-Neal BRONZE
Westville, New Jersey
Daniel Seeley Hicks-Neal BRONZE, Westville, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
The Voice
By BreLee SILVER
Sula, Montana
BreLee SILVER, Sula, Montana
7 articles 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
Nothing to say
By niceenouf PLATINUM
Garfield, New Jersey
niceenouf PLATINUM, Garfield, New Jersey
26 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"As we move on, you forget, we both move on, with no regret."

View profile
Poetry
leap
By carreyelaine GOLD
Arlington, Tennessee
carreyelaine GOLD, Arlington, Tennessee
12 articles 4 photos 1 comment
View profile

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 5 comments.

OneProzacADay PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 21 2014 at 11:23 pm
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
37 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while." -Eckhart Tolle

View profile
WOW I've read this how many times and I JUST realized there's a freaking typo in the last line. god and people ask me to proofread their stuff
OneProzacADay PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 7:24 pm
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
37 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while." -Eckhart Tolle

View profile
thank you so much! it's great to get feedback
OneProzacADay PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 7:24 pm
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
37 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while." -Eckhart Tolle

View profile
thanks! e. e. cummings is definitely one of my writing idols
KristinC PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 5:56 pm
KristinC PLATINUM, Cupertino, California
27 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past.&quot;<br /> -F.Scott Fitzgerald, the Great Gatsby<br /> <br /> &quot;To write it, it took three months; to conceive it three minutes; to collect the data in it all my life.&quot;<br /> -F. Scott Fitzgerald

View profile
The emotion and imagery in this poem is stunning! I love the rawness and ee-cummings-esque nature of your prose! :)
TanviKusum DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 3:56 pm
TanviKusum DIAMOND, Gurgaon, Other
89 articles 4 photos 197 comments

Favorite Quote:
All men who have achieved great things have been great dreamers. <br /> Orison Swett Marden<br /> <br /> &quot;The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say.&quot; - Anais Nin<br /> <br /> we speak in hushed voices so as to not wake our memories

View profile
I love this! It's beautifully written I love the emotions, it's somewhat how I feel