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Can you hear me ?

November 1, 2013
By KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

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If i lied and told you I was fine,

would you stop to listen?

If i showed you the X-ray of my heart,

would you then realize it was broken?

If I called out your name in total darkness,

could you find your way back with no problem?

If I cried in front of the world,

then could you see the pain you caused?

If I begged on my knees,

would you finally let me be?

If I bled more than I should,

would you even began to pity me?

If I worked hard to prove,

would you even think twice?

If I moved across towns,

cities,

states,

countries,

to be with you,
would you then understand how much I love you?

© Asia B., Hudson, MA

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KaylaaLovee GOLD said...
on Nov. 7 2013 at 4:37 pm
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

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Thank you :) lol  
BorderlineGenius777 SILVER said...
on Nov. 7 2013 at 3:27 pm
BorderlineGenius777 SILVER, Lewiston, Idaho
7 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If all our misfortunes were laid in one common heap, whence everyone must take an equal portion, most would be content to take their own and depart."- Socrates

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I like it, just because I am a sappy romantic thats used to being broken-hearted all the time because apparently life doesnt see fit to let me have lovexD but it is a bit cliche. However, its a good poem. 4/5:3
KaylaaLovee GOLD said...
on Nov. 6 2013 at 12:25 pm
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

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Thank you! Appreciate the honesty!! <33
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 6 2013 at 12:22 pm
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 147 comments
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I'm going to be very honest because I don't want to see people at loss just because I lied to them. XD I thought that, in the beginning it was a little cliche d but I can see, I mean, its pretty obvious that you have a lot of potential. You can definiely do better. But it doesn't mean I didn't like it, because I loved it. I can see wht you're trying to convey. Thank you. Good uck. 
KaylaaLovee GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 7:14 pm
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I&#039;m already better than them.&quot;

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Thanks for the honesty ! <333  
KaylaaLovee GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 7:13 pm
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I&#039;m already better than them.&quot;

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Thankssssssss <3333
Shade3043 DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 7:11 pm
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Favorite Quote:
When I was a boy, I would always hear scary things in the news and my mother would say to me, &quot;Always look for the helpers. Everywhere you look you will always find people helping.&quot; - Fred Rogers

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I like it, sorta. It's sorta boring and sorta repetitive, but it's an overall good poem with good meaning. I like it, but it needs work. 3/5. :)
taylortheawesomeness SILVER said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 7:10 pm
taylortheawesomeness SILVER, Cleburne, Texas
5 articles 5 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
you can do anythin, but not everything. by david allen

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thats amazing!  
KaylaaLovee GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 11:09 am
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I&#039;m already better than them.&quot;

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Thanks!! The ending is my fave too lol
Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 11:04 am
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness&quot;

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This is really sweet. the ending is by far the best. its just omazement.
Radwa said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 10:08 am
Radwa, Doha, Texas
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it was realy nice poem
KaylaaLovee GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:55 am
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I&#039;m already better than them.&quot;

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Typo hahah but thanksssss  
FlyingKite BRONZE said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:52 am
FlyingKite BRONZE, Loveland, Ohio
4 articles 2 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Liar liar pantalones de fuego! -Phineas and Ferb

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Begin* It's really good though!
KaylaaLovee GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:30 am
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I&#039;m already better than them.&quot;

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Thanks for the feedback!!
Zoya_Khan GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:14 am
Zoya_Khan GOLD, Gujranwala, Other
19 articles 0 photos 420 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where LOGIC ends, FAITH begins.<br /> - Zoya Khan

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Maybe it would be better if it was song lyrics. But anyways, good job!