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I love you, too.

January 6, 2012
By alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
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alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
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What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

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At the edge of the hospital bed
I feel a thousand miles away.
Can he hear me?
I hope he can hear me.
My heart ushers his eyes to open
Only to find stillness in return.
I want to paint his face
Put the color back in his once rosy cheeks.
Just yesterday that smile lit up the room.
Now the beep of his heart rate reminds me
To breath
To touch
To feel
I want to break the monitor.
Put a miracle in the rhythm
Of a heart that fails to keep beating.
The wires all over are holding him here
Giving me one last chance
To say goodbye.
If he can even hear me.
I pray to God he can hear me.
I find his hand under the sheets
I hold onto it for dear life.
My heart aches to feel the warmth
To feel the life that loved to live
To hear his laughter once again
And put it in my dreams for safe keeping.
Daddies are supposed to laugh.
Why can't I hear him one more time?
The memories stay as his soul leaves
I say the last words I want him to hear
Can he hear me?
I pray to God he can hear me.
His voice echoes in my head
"I love you, too."

© Kimberly C., Houston, TX

The author's comments:
My dad passed away last year and poetry has helped me cope. It's my heart spilled out into words. It feels amazing.
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cebomar9 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 9:15 am
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This is just powerful. Great Job
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Depressing!!! I like it ;)
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on Jan. 9 2012 at 9:53 pm
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I'm with alice...i almost cried too...I don't know my real father but I appreciate my uncle who might as well be.
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so beautiful. it made me want to cry. it made me realize that i should appreciate my father. thank you for this.
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Wow this is incredible, my friend's dad just recently passed away as well...wow...
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WONDERIFIC>... that was just amazing... I was i could write like that.
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This was incredible. I'm terrible at poetry, and so it alwayds amazes me at how people can pull it off, but this was exceptional. Very well done. Totally emotional and believable.
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i thought it was beautiful and the way you wrote it .......... i love love poems and i think this is one of my favorites thanks for writing such an amazing poem
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Heart breaking. Very lovely and emotional poem!
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my heart just broke your words areso powerfull through you writing oh gosh awesome job
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Very Good! I Love it!
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Striking piece. My most strongest feelings of empathy and sympathy are extended by it.
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Loved it! It almost made me cry, and that is rare. You have a gift, bravo!
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That is very sad, but very touching. I like how you make the reader feel the emotion your character does.
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It is such a great poem!! :D You should definitely keep posting this kind of poems!!
alligator6 SILVER said...
on Jan. 8 2012 at 8:11 pm
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thank you SO much. i really appreciate it. :)
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So beautiful! I'm tearing up right now. I know that nothing will be the same without your dad.. But I really hope that you can hope. And I love the fact that you found writing as a creative outlet - because you are an amazing writer. Keep up the AMAZING work!! (:
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this is soooo sweet! i love it!! at first i thought it was about a boyfriend... but thats cute that its about ur dad :)