Now that I know this was based off of a dream it makes more sense. Or as much sense as dreams can make.

It's still a haunting story whether or not your audience fully understands it. I think that's the way it is and should be with poetry. A reader never gets the same experience that you did while writing, but they can still be moved by what you wrote.

I loved the connection you made with Ceres. (Once I googled her...)

I was a bit confused by the ending and wished you would continue the story, but it was written beautifully.

Were you personifying a rennaisance with Ceres or was the name just used because you thought it fit? I was just wondering how far you wanted the connection between your character and the goddess to go?