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Counting Breaths

November 30, 2009
By Zachary SILVER, Medical Lake, Washington
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1,2,3,4…
Wait, I’m awake
But I’m falling even faster
Falling faster into sleep
Into deep dark sleep.
1,2,3,4…
When I dream, I hope it’s something
Something that is you
All I dream of is you.
When I sleep, I hope I dream
Because when I dream it’s you.
1, 2…
I’m falling faster, so quiet
I can hear you breathing
You’re already sleeping
I hope your dreaming.
I kiss your lips, and fade away
Till the morning, when I see you again
1, 2, 3… 3, 3, 3….

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Caroline35 GOLD said...
on Dec. 27 2009 at 12:17 pm
Caroline35 GOLD, Bain De Bretagne ( Britany), Other
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We can totally feel the narrator ( I don't know if you talk about you or not ) falling asleep and I really relate to this poem. Well done !
ashleygurl BRONZE said...
on Dec. 26 2009 at 10:21 pm
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ahmazing and totally sweet.