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The Body MAG

December 5, 2008
By L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
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Is a body unconscious a person still?
No mind is present to govern its deeds.
Does a body have dreams, or a fate to fulfill?
No way to feel it when it bleeds.
Can I be a human, too?
Maybe I’m not even real.
But I am flesh, through and through?
Scratch it up, then let it heal.
Or can a monster have a mind?
An evil thing, or weeping ghost.
Are living and breathing intertwined?
A being punished for its host.
With electrical thoughts, is it ever alive?
Just a skin, an empty shell.
Is the soul really needed for the body to thrive?
A carcass washed up on the shores of hell.



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realman said...
on Dec. 19 2019 at 2:37 pm
realman, Sacramento, California
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it makes sense and good rythm

on Oct. 10 2014 at 1:09 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Wow. This has so much emotion, just so much rawness that it is rather torturing. I don't know when this was published, probably a long time ago, but congrats on having this published! :) You deserv it. You have talent and greatness in you; you're a great and wonderful and talented writer. Thank you so much, for sharing this. :)

im_gail BRONZE said...
on Nov. 7 2013 at 9:39 pm
im_gail BRONZE, Barrington, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"these moments will be stories one day"- Perks of Being a Wallflower

i loved this

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 28 2013 at 12:03 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

omg i just love this. the rhythm is magic.

Abby96 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 7 2013 at 5:03 pm
Abby96 BRONZE, Leesburg, Virginia
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I love the rhythm to this as well as the fact that you managed to make it rhyme and still sound good. I have nothing against free verse but I love when a poem sounds like a song. I also like the subject. Instead of the usual love/generally depressing poem, you managed to invoke deeper thought. The last two lines were amazing!

on Feb. 5 2013 at 5:03 pm
PirateCountry DIAMOND, Muncie, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve."

ARGH. You've taken all my dreams and made then come true! This is 100% GENIUS. You deserve these compliments! TAKE THEM!

on Jan. 30 2013 at 9:15 pm
TheCylceGoesRound PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
When the rich wage war it's the poor who die.

absolutely, one hundred percent beautiful

on Jan. 12 2013 at 8:19 pm
Anansesem BRONZE, Cave Spring, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Will our life not be a tunnel between two vague clarities? Or will it not be a clarity between two dark triangles?" ~Pablo Neruda

Beautiful! Heart-wrenching! This better have been printed in TeenInk. I'm about 90% elation and 10% envy because now I've seen the way I aim to write.

TheoBV SILVER said...
on Dec. 25 2012 at 5:49 pm
TheoBV SILVER, Pound Ridge, New York
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My thoughts exactly.

haley69 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 2 2012 at 12:30 pm
haley69 BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
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dito same here

on Oct. 20 2012 at 9:30 am
Lobsterhead BRONZE, Salem, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Walruses are not a toy"

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH THIS IS SO AWESOME!!!!! You're like a cross between Shakespeare and Frost! It's so eerie yet it makes you think....great job! Continue writing! I'm a fan! I look forward to seeing an "L.Neale" book at the library soon!

on Oct. 15 2012 at 11:10 am
NotWriting_Bazinga PLATINUM, Park Rapids, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;She thought in Italics and felt in CAPITALS.&quot; Henry James, Jr<br /> &quot;The terrible part is the truth is the only thing you want to hear.... but the last thing you want to admit.&quot; Casey Dalton

Such tortured emotion... it makes my soul cry out to you. :') dont stop writing. chekc out my Just an Organ. i think you can relate :)

on Sep. 20 2012 at 2:44 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.&rdquo;<br /> - Martin Luther King Jr.

This poem was reallY good and made me think. I hope that you continue writing! Perhaps you can read some of my poems such as 'Abused' and 'Floating Spirit'.

Jordan T. said...
on May. 1 2012 at 2:17 pm
Great poem, I really liked it and liked how you used stanzas and verses. I also liked when you used personification with the ghost weeping. All of this figurative language is amazing.

on Jan. 26 2012 at 8:31 am
Quaffle3dg BRONZE, Inman, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Carpe Diem, seize the day boys, make your life extraordinary.&quot; -Robin Williams

the first thing i said after i read this poem was WOW nuff said...truely incredible

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 9:17 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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Wow, this poem really blew me away. It's very insightful and poses interesting ideas to chew on. I also loved the way you used rhyme. 

on Nov. 30 2011 at 11:39 pm
RejoiceTheySay... PLATINUM, Topeka, Kansas
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wow. can i meet you? id really like to talk. ha  ha

gleek1234 GOLD said...
on Nov. 17 2011 at 9:42 am
gleek1234 GOLD, Burlington, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
You did let me go you left me broken and heartless, crying out for help, with no one to answer my calls-Shilpa Pierpont-Hale ( poem) Love hurts

This is really good but are you ok?

on Nov. 14 2011 at 7:56 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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very good , i really like it

on Oct. 13 2011 at 11:16 am
JTboiiDrama PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
It is what it is

LOVE IT!!!! I heard Justin Bieber read this too. thats high up you might really get a shoot to go big