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A Summer Alone

September 9, 2018
By Asterion GOLD, Toronto, Ontario
Asterion GOLD, Toronto, Ontario
15 articles 3 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all true art and all science."<br /> <br /> - Albert Einstein


As I gazed out onto the sparkling water, crystal, aqua, clear. Heart heavy with emotion, heart heavy with despair.
I hear pure amusement. screaming laughs pierce the air.
I look across behind the darkened glass and wonder if I was there. Would I have friends who cared enough to talk to me at all? Would I have people near me?
A love who love me for me?
‘I had my chance’ my mind speaks distant in my brain.
‘I had the chance’ it speaks in disdain.
I think upon the time where love and friendship bloomed.
I think about my life at heart wondering: what did I do?
I sit here in my misery alone without a soul.
Writing these words in silence as the night moves on.
In the day I sleep until my eyes cannot be shut.
I dream of other places where I might be loved.
A chance to run away.
I chance to start again.
A lonely night approaches whenever I wake up.
It sit on my chair facing the pale grey wall.
Trying to remember my life before it fell.
I lost myself one day.
A summer long ago.
I summer I knew that I would begin to go
I lay upon my bed.
My head hung hard and low.
I hummed the words of this old poem to remember the old days. Then I put a bullet in my skull to flush the pain away.



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Asterion GOLD said...
on Sep. 24 2018 at 1:49 am
Asterion GOLD, Toronto, Ontario
15 articles 3 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all true art and all science."<br /> <br /> - Albert Einstein

Sorry. I posted on the wrong poem. I meant the other poem I wrote: The boy, the man, the father. Oops!

Sorry for the confusion. I do really appreciate the feedback though. Thanks so much for reading my work!

- Asterion :D XD

Asterion GOLD said...
on Sep. 24 2018 at 1:47 am
Asterion GOLD, Toronto, Ontario
15 articles 3 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all true art and all science."<br /> <br /> - Albert Einstein

Thanks @FluffMania! I really appreciate the feedback. I thought the repeat of the last lines would give a great affect and I'm happy to see you noticed it. I try to have deeper meanings in all my poems and I really appreciate you got one out of mine. Thanks!

-Asterion

on Sep. 23 2018 at 11:27 pm
FluffMania BRONZE, Republic, Missouri
2 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Your need for acceptance can make you invisible in this world.&quot; -Jim Carrey

This is astounding. I typically don't like poems that rhyme, but you are able to use this tool very well! The last line really got to me, too. While some poems are effective because the reader knows it's going to happen, yours is effective because the reader doesn't know what hit them. The rest of the poem focuses on the 'why' instead of mixing in the 'how,' which was a fresh perspective.