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Hit Me

April 19, 2013
By TevyRae PLATINUM, Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
TevyRae PLATINUM, Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
24 articles 7 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Here is a small fact: You are going to die.&quot; ~The Book Thief<br /> &quot;You have no stupidity inside of your adorable little self.&quot; ~Mikey Pasterik


I wish he would hit me.
I pray, that someday,
He'll leave me with scars,
Be the cause of my bleeding,
Of my painful cries.
I wish he would smack me,
Across the face,
Leave a bruise,
A swollen jaw.
I wish he would make me scream out in pain,
Beg for mercy.
I wish he would just hit me.

Because it would hurt less
Than his words.



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BethZ SILVER said...
on Jul. 14 2014 at 8:15 am
BethZ SILVER, Atlanta, Georgia
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No problem but by line i meant stanza. Sorry.

on Jul. 7 2014 at 10:11 am
TevyRae PLATINUM, Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
24 articles 7 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Here is a small fact: You are going to die.&quot; ~The Book Thief<br /> &quot;You have no stupidity inside of your adorable little self.&quot; ~Mikey Pasterik

thanks for the feedback, i appreciate it. :)

BethZ SILVER said...
on Jul. 7 2014 at 10:07 am
BethZ SILVER, Atlanta, Georgia
8 articles 0 photos 16 comments
i like this as well. but i think you could elaborate more on the ending. like say or word the last line differently so that is doesnt sound as cliche. besides that i really like this poem!