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Secrets

July 10, 2011
By Livvy97 GOLD, Warren, New Jersey
Livvy97 GOLD, Warren, New Jersey
17 articles 1 photo 26 comments

Exchanged as important messages
Whispered between small children
They are something to be told, to be spoken, to be heard
Within them is an unspoken bond
Between the teller and the listener
It must be contained
Never to be revealed
Curiosity scoops such messages and beckons for them to be told
It lurks behind each message, like a hidden word
Only seen once the message is opened and must be overcome as soon it is released
It forces them to tell
Its whispers implant themselves within the trusted one, always there, never seen
Merely an arrangement of words causes so much pain
But everyone knows, secrets are no fun unless you tell everyone


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Livvy97 GOLD said...
on Aug. 12 2011 at 3:47 pm
Livvy97 GOLD, Warren, New Jersey
17 articles 1 photo 26 comments
Thank you! i will take your suggestion into consideration!

on Aug. 12 2011 at 1:04 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

I liked the last line but your message seemed to get lost a few times. You tied it together well though. Keep writing! :)

Livvy97 GOLD said...
on Aug. 9 2011 at 10:16 am
Livvy97 GOLD, Warren, New Jersey
17 articles 1 photo 26 comments
Thank you I'll look into the broken rhymes

on Aug. 8 2011 at 10:39 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~<br /> ~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~<br /> ~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than<br /> a distant memory.~

The poem has some intelligent usage of words . My only critisicism is that it seemed to have a rhyme scheme that was very...broken. I loved the concept , and overall it was nice to read.