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Tears

May 25, 2009
By SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
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As I sit alone listening to sad songs
I try to figure out all of my wrongs
A drop of tear slides down my cheek
But crying just shows that I'm so weak

I must continue to stand strong
I'll write my own heartbroken song
I'll sing the words of my heart
You and I can't be too far apart

How'd our story come to this end?
It was just starting to extend
And it was so sudden and unexpected
My soul crushed as I was rejected

If only I could rewrite our romance
If only you'd give me just one chance
If only you'd see me for who I am
You'd understand I'm not one of them

I'll still hold on to you for awhile
To prove that I might be worthwhile
I'm not as shallow as they were
I've got nothing to do with her

My heart refuses to let you go
I love you too much, you should know
You tell me that you like me too
But I wonder if it's really true

We're strangers now, nothing more
Leaving my heart hollow and sore
Deprived of the love I have given out
That I shall have to live without

The sun and moon rise and fall
And I throw my empty heart at the wall
Tears stream past my barricade
Because my love for you will not fade.

The author's comments:
I wrote this about a boy I like who's afraid to love me back. He was hurt badly after his first date and he thinks that I'll hurt him too. If only he'd give me a chance..

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gkal213 said...
on Jun. 24 2009 at 5:59 pm
O_O I love rhymes

on Jun. 24 2009 at 4:07 pm
camille_1441 PLATINUM, Westerville, Ohio
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Hey I wanted to thank you for the comment! thanks a million and one =)



haha you know whats funny? I just finished a poem called tears that should be coming out soon! look for it and let me know what you think, I love yours it's so beautiful, heartbreak poems are always awsome because their sincere and from the heart like yours! =)

on Jun. 23 2009 at 9:03 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

It's very beautiful. But, just forget him. He's not worth it if he makes you throw your empty heart at the wall. =S not a very nice guy.

Vanessa Lee said...
on Jun. 22 2009 at 2:00 am
dude, forget him (if you haven't already). he's not worth your time.

GREAT POEM BTW :) honestly, it's not my type but yeah.. 5 STARS ANYWAY.

on Jun. 21 2009 at 2:07 am
BEST POEM EVER!! 5* XD

Karii~ said...
on Jun. 20 2009 at 7:13 pm
nice poem ^^ i liek the last stanza best, how you refer back to the beginning with the tears. good job !

on Jun. 20 2009 at 1:39 am
animelover10192 BRONZE, Manahawkin, New Jersey
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im amazed at how much meaning is put in this poem..its really amazing its like one of my fav poems so far!

on Jun. 19 2009 at 11:24 pm
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
16 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"

i really like this poem..I have gone through a lot with boys and i can totally understand and relate to this poem

on Jun. 19 2009 at 8:03 pm
pinksage33 BRONZE, Woodstock, New York
4 articles 1 photo 211 comments
This is a great poem.

on Jun. 19 2009 at 7:54 pm
xxlaurenxx BRONZE, Liberty, Missouri
1 article 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Smile. Less questions asked.

I can really relate to this. I love it. Keep writing!

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on Jun. 19 2009 at 6:19 pm
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
3 articles 0 photos 407 comments

Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

You had me wanting to weep at the first verse. I really hope he realizes that he'd be lucky to have someone who writes such beautiful poetry. I really liked it. I can't tell you how much I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing.

God bless,

...,

on Jun. 17 2009 at 4:12 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
70 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life&#039;s a mountain on a beach&quot;-Unknown<br /> &quot;Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It&#039;s remarkable how often those two traits coincide.&quot;-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

Wow, I LOVE this. The words you use, the image, the meaning. Really amazing.

amyxu said...
on Jun. 12 2009 at 6:56 pm
Wow I like it! Nice and simple, yet it says it all. It has a great rhythm to it, as well. Hey, if you like to read rhyming poetry, come check out my poems "Scars Overpaid" and "The Statue." Thanks and good job!

Fangz PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 11 2009 at 12:32 pm
Fangz PLATINUM, Ware, Massachusetts
37 articles 15 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
In necessariis unitas, in dubiis libertas, in omnibus caritas.

Nice. You're good with flow and rhyme. It could be a little more creative though. Maybe you could experiment with figurative language, or formal poetry. I bet you'd be good with villanelle.

Bunniiexoxo said...
on Jun. 11 2009 at 2:19 am
I LUFF this poem <3333

If I didnt noe you (Carrie) wrote it, I wudve SWORN it was some famous poet person guy..O-O

i already told you that but owell <33

on Jun. 8 2009 at 7:57 pm
FashionGuru DIAMOND, Manhattan, New York
55 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I don&#039;t do fashion, I am fashion.&quot; -Coco Chanel

You're work is fantastic. I love the detail words you used, splendid. Keep writing!!

RAWR. said...
on Jun. 5 2009 at 5:59 am
If this poem gets published, someone please buy this book for my birthday!

Emily said...
on Jun. 4 2009 at 11:46 pm
aww carrie. your really good at poetry!:]

Good job!

on Jun. 4 2009 at 10:00 pm
MeghanMichelle GOLD, Hooksett, New Hampshire
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You are a really great poet!

PK4evr ELITE said...
on Jun. 4 2009 at 2:19 pm
PK4evr ELITE, Allen, Texas
105 articles 5 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make grape juice, then watch everyone wonder how you did it!

Agree with what everyone else said- beautiful. :). Nice rhyme scheme. Also, thanks for your comments :)