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The Moutian of No Return

December 19, 2013
By BigBay123, North Berwick, Maine
BigBay123, North Berwick, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
For everytime you get knocked down get back up


Summary:

With the dead carcass behind me I find a stump sitting about ten feet off the trail and take a seat. The adrenaline is wearing off and it is starting to set in. The fact that I just did what no one person has ever done before. I can't take credit for all of it though if it was not for the help of my fallen comrades this would have never happened. They lost their lives so that i could accomplish my goal. I forever will have respect for them. A prayer for my friends and a long drive home is all I have left to do.


Bailey C.

The Moutian of No Return


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Cat521 SILVER said...
on Dec. 25 2013 at 8:20 pm
Cat521 SILVER, Berwick, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"Think, before you speak. Know, before you react. Love, before you hate. There is far too much anger and hatred in the world for you to be the cause of anymore."

I can tell it's good, just a little more work and it could be truly amazing.

BigBay123 said...
on Dec. 24 2013 at 9:51 pm
BigBay123, North Berwick, Maine
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
For everytime you get knocked down get back up

Thank you i tried really hard on this

chewie said...
on Dec. 24 2013 at 8:59 pm
awesome story!

bethanyella7 said...
on Dec. 24 2013 at 11:52 am
Great job!  It was a cute expansion of an urban legend.  Nice work kiddo!

Cat521 SILVER said...
on Dec. 24 2013 at 11:38 am
Cat521 SILVER, Berwick, Maine
6 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Think, before you speak. Know, before you react. Love, before you hate. There is far too much anger and hatred in the world for you to be the cause of anymore."

It's quite good but just consider using some imagery to place the reader into the story, so they feel almost a part of it.