The story is good, like the plot and all, I really liked the idea - but the grammar and spelling mistakes kinda distracted from the story. 

You have talent - but you need Spellcheck!

yeah, hate to sound picky but the grammar really needs some working on. it kinda catches your eye and draws away from the actual story.

but i loved it all the same and you have to keep going!!!

why thankyou :)
and yes i have always been rather horrible with grammar, haha
i shall remember what you have said when i post the next chapter, and i shall check out your story :)

thanks - Sep

I like the story so far. Boarding schools are always cool to read about :) I'm looking forward to reading more.

Please don't take any of this personally, just trying to help: You should always capitalize the beginning of a sentence and put a period at the end. There are a lot of run-on sentences in the first chapter that could be broken into separate sentences. You should also put a comma before an ending quotation mark if following the quote is "he said" or "she said" or "he shouted" etc. Otherwise, use a period before the ending quote.

I'm looking forward to when they form a band. :) I actually have a novel up in the realistic fiction novel section about a band as well, it's called The Formation if you want to check it out.