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Bullying Secretly

May 12, 2013
By BekahBoo GOLD, Battle Ground, Washington
BekahBoo GOLD, Battle Ground, Washington
10 articles 4 photos 7 comments

You say you are my friend
and your with me 'til the end
but what you don't realize,
although it's probably no surprise,
that the pain you cause me everyday
is pain that does not easily go away.
All of our friends think your joking
and I feel like I'm choking
because i know your being serious
while everyone else is oblivious
to the torture your causing me.
So the only way I can be free
from you who is so venomous
is to end my helplessness
and stand up to you.
I know there will be few
who take my side
but this way I can keep my pride.
I'll say "Good-bye" to my dear frenemy
and she can be done with her poisonous jealousy.


The author's comments:
I had a friend who made fun of me everyday in a joking manner about how my clothes were ugly or how stupid I was. I had to tell her what was wrong and stop talking to her because I was tired of being embarrassed and bullied in front of my friends. I hope that my poem will inspire someone to stand up for themselves.

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Reese18 SILVER said...
on May. 16 2013 at 7:04 pm
Reese18 SILVER, Redford, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
that's totally awesome

Wow that was absolutley amazing. I love every minute of reading it! Your very talented!

BekahBoo GOLD said...
on May. 16 2013 at 12:55 am
BekahBoo GOLD, Battle Ground, Washington
10 articles 4 photos 7 comments
Thank you! I love the feedback! It helps a lot. Is there anyway you could read my other poem also?

on May. 16 2013 at 12:52 am
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You&#039;re on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who&#039;ll decide where to go...&rdquo; <br /> ― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You&#039;ll Go!

This is good. I know how you feel, too. I'm a bit of a grammar nazi, so quickly, "your" needs to be "you're." This is "You are," not the "your" as in I like your shirt." Content-wise, it's good. You're realizing you need to stand up to her, even if it causes you pain because it isn't even comparable to the pain she is causing you. Presentation-wise, I would encourage you to have some fun with the words! You have some gems in here, so continue using that. I really like the second-to-last line! Play around with the organization of the words in the sentence to your advantage, and that will make it even awesomer!