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Isolated

September 22, 2010
By hellomonday BRONZE, Lehi, Utah
hellomonday BRONZE, Lehi, Utah
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We're all a little weird and life's a little weird, and when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we meet up with them and fall into a mutual weirdness & call it love.


Everything was supposed to go as planned.

The scientist had everything prepared: the bed was ready, the tools were laid out neatly on the counter next to a sink, and all of his beakers and vials were filled with various gases and liquids. Of course, he had to be prepared. Today was the most important day of his career. Today would decide whether he would become famous and rich (but possibly go to jail), or fail miserably and live the rest of his life in hiding. Today he was testing his life’s work on an experiment of epic proportions.

Artificial intelligence. It had been declared illegal back in the year 2078, but the scientist had a theory: if his experiment worked like he planned, everyone would be so amazed that they wouldn’t care if it was legal or not, because he had created possibly the most realistic, human-like robot in the history of machinery. It could walk, it could talk, and it could think not as a machine, but as an independent being. But it was also better than a human – it could do things that a mundane person could only dream of. It was like some kind of modern-day Superman. Her name? Aya. He had accomplished what only God could do – he had created life. All there was left to do was wake her up. The scientist believed that his invention could change the world. That’s why everything had to work out perfectly.

Long story short: It didn’t.


The author's comments:
This is the prologue for the story I'm working on. I wrote it for a class at school. I have like, 30 more pages, but I decided to just post this and see what you guys think of it before posting the whole thing.

Basically, the main character will be a robot that can think for itself. She has to try to blend in with humans in future-day New York City, otherwise she would be captured and destroyed by the Omega Corporation because artificial intelligence has been declared illegal by Cron Hawk, the dictator of America (haha, I know. :P)

Let me know what you think! :)

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Curly_Sue said...
on Oct. 14 2010 at 4:30 pm
Curly_Sue, Sand Springs, Oklahoma
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very good. ik have a feeling you could go far with this. something tells me i'll be a fan all the way through.

if you ever have time check out some of my stuff. (plz???)


on Oct. 6 2010 at 8:05 pm
hellomonday BRONZE, Lehi, Utah
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We're all a little weird and life's a little weird, and when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we meet up with them and fall into a mutual weirdness & call it love.

Thanks, both of you. :) I will post the first chapter in a little while.

VampireX: Hopefully mine is the story you've been dying for. :D

 

mudpuppy: Yeah, robots are cool. :) I haven't read a good robot story...ever, so I decided to write one! I hope you'll like it.


on Sep. 26 2010 at 10:00 am
mudpuppy BRONZE, Orangeburg, South Carolina
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Life is like a box of cheese and flower petal sometimes it's soft and sweet, sometimes it just plain stinks. - M.J.

I find one am interested in the idea of artifical intelligence. My school has this robotics club and ever since than I have been eager to read a good robot story and this is it.  I have many questions that need to be question when it comes to this piece and am excited to learn see more. :) 

VampireX GOLD said...
on Sep. 24 2010 at 8:39 am
VampireX GOLD, Spotsylvania, Virginia
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Go for it! I just read it and i'm dying for a new one!