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September 20, 2012
By EatSleepWrite95 GOLD, Dallastown, Pennsylvania
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I passed him in the hall today, he didn’t even glance me way. Not surprising, ever since we stopped talking, he’s been acting this way. Like he doesn’t see me. Doesn’t care. I watch him walk into his class room, without even looking back. I wish things could go back to how they used to be…but they never will. I messed things up. He’s got a girlfriend now. He’s forgotten all about me.

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I passed her in the hallway today. She looked so pretty. I didn’t say hi, it would be weird after everything that’s happened. I wonder if she knows how often I think about her, how often I wish I hadn’t screwed up everything. All I ever think about is her. When I look as my girlfriend, all I see is her. I wish I could change things...

© Halsey S., Marblehead, MA

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kindlegirl GOLD said...
on Mar. 28 2013 at 9:50 pm
kindlegirl GOLD, Iberia, Missouri
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Okay first off I loved it!!! But on the other hand I want more. Im usually not like this but this story caught me I've been trying to right one like this, and I've learned that you have to have some back round. Please right a second part tell us about the new girlfriend, bring us to the home of the the guy, give me names. DETAIL..... PLEASE TRY I NEED MORE. This is such a great story, you could have a great and passiionate story here. Give a little foreplay, show a little anger between the two main characters... Do something because I can not strain anough that this is just the beginning of a great story..... :)
cuckoo_for_cocoa_puffs SILVER said...
on Sep. 30 2012 at 9:06 pm
cuckoo_for_cocoa_puffs SILVER, Superior, Colorado
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"We are not Africans because we are born in Africa; we are Africans because Africa is born in us"- Chester Higgins Jr.

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DETAILS, TEENINKER!! but really it's a good base and I'm intrigued, so maybe you could write something along the lines of: We Still Like Each Other But It's a Simple Case of Bad Communication Part 2? Yes. Very much appreciated ;)
Paige4699 GOLD said...
on Sep. 28 2012 at 2:51 pm
Paige4699 GOLD, Jackson, Rhode Island
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To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.

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Really good! I liked the comparison and how the story switched. But you may want to add a little more detail and maybe some background as to what happened beforehand.
EatSleepWrite95 said...
on Sep. 27 2012 at 5:42 pm
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the suggestions too.
JuiceyGirl said...
on Sep. 25 2012 at 11:36 am
JuiceyGirl, Draper, Utah
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There is beauty in everything, just not everyone sees it.

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I liked how you showed both of their sides of the story. It's a cool idea and you did well with it. But I wish you would have elbaroted more on the situatuion they were in instead of just "He has a girlfriend, I'm sad." and "I have a girlfriend, but I wish she was my girlfriend."